Harry Potter original character

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  1. Dnae Ila

    Dnae Ila Gaidin

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    So... I feel a little weird making a whole new thread for this, but I didn't want to search too far back looking for a Harry Potter thread.
    And I'm really not sure if this is an appropriate forum for this.
    But anyway, it's here now.

    Ahem. Since reading Harry Potter years back, I've had this character in my head that I mentally inserted into the story. I'm sure I'm not the only one who does this to books. Anyway, she's been more persistent than any other original character I've thought of for any other book, with a pretty fleshed out backstory and everything.
    I don't know if I'm going to or even really want to write a fanfic about her, but if I do consider it, I want a completely honest assessment of the character first. So here's basically all I have thought of for her. I've tried to keep things as canon as possible so that it could have happened within the story as written, because that's the way I like my daydreams. So, if you'd like, give it a bit of a read and let me know. Is she believable? Mary Sue? Laughable? Unoriginal? Cool? Good or bad, tell me what you think, honestly.

    Emily Wescott, witch, 14 months younger than Harry.
    Mother, Alice Wescott, witch
    Father, Roger Wescott, wizard
    Uncle, William Snyder, squib. Alice's brother, 9 years older.
    Not shunned by his family, Will nevertheless moved to the USA to pursue a muggle life. He married and quickly bore a daughter, Morgan Snyder, a muggle. He and his wife separated when Morgan was 5 but remained cordial, sharing custody.
    Alice and Roger married 14 years after Morgan was born. (Alice was 26) Seven years later, she became pregnant.
    A month prior to Voldemort's fall, Roger was killed by a death-eater while attempting to protect a muggle family that was being terrorized. Shock and grief sent Alice into labor, and Emily was born 5 weeks prematurely.
    Fast forward two years, things are getting back to normal after the death-eaters have all been rounded up or gone into hiding. Alice is out and hit by a lorry while Emily is at a neighbor's. No wizards or witches are nearby, and Alice dies.
    Alice's mother is an elderly widow, and Roger's parents refuse to take Emily in due to a combination of grief for their son and a traveling lifestyle that would not easily accommodate a small child.
    Will volunteers to take Emily, but his daughter Morgan, now 23 and the owner/manager of a locally successful chocolate shop in Ohio, convinces him that she is more able to care for a child than he, at 44. However, Morgan was raised as a muggle with no knowledge of the magical side of her family. Since Emily was old enough to remember some things, and since she was most likely a witch herself, Will was given permission to tell Morgan some things. She clearly was skeptical at first, but eventually believed.
    Emily was raised in a mostly muggle life. Morgan told her the few things that she knew of magic and wizards, and Will told her little more. Most of what Emily knew were the basics of what was, legends and tales, and of course, the grave need to keep it secret.
    Saddened that she could not care for her granddaughter or watch her grow up, Alice's mother had set up a Hogwarts fund for Emily, and had paid into it regularly over the years, so upon reaching her eleventh birthday, Emily received the expected enrollment letter by owl.
    Morgan packed up her cousin/daughter for wizarding school with promises to send lots of letters, treats, and gifts. (I'm a little unsure here of the wizarding trans-oceanic post system. Would they still use owls? Even magical owls couldn't fly nonstop across the ocean, could they?)
    Emily arrived at Hogwarts and, being a headstrong and ambitious girl, was sorted into Slytherin. Emily developed a somewhat low opinion of Harry and company, having marked them in her mind as troublemakers and being rather skeptical of the whole boy-who-lived story. During her first few years, she emerged as a leader of Slytherin girls, and despite being a year younger, she was pursued by Draco, more than half to consolidate his power over the House than of any real affection for her. Seeing this, she rebuffed him more than once before accepting his invitation to the Yule Ball for the Tri-Wizard Tournament. During that evening, Draco attempted to take more liberties with Emily than she was comfortable with, resulting in her slapping him thoroughly and storming from the hall. As this happened somewhat early in the evening, Draco did not leave the ball and instead partnered with Pansy Parkinson, who, due to Draco's leading her on, had arrived stag for the sole purpose of sabotaging Emily and stealing Draco from her. Needless to say, Pansy was quite happy that her work was done for her.
    From that point, the two were at odds, Emily having lost what little respect she'd had for Draco, and Draco hating her for the public humiliation of the slapping.
    By her fourth year, Emily had come to realize the truth of Harry and Voldemort and became the sole Slytherin member of Dumbledore's Army. There, she became friends with Luna Lovegood who, unlike the other members, seemed completely unperturbed by her House. Emily and Luna spent time together outside their secret training and became close. Near the end of Emily's fourth year, she confessed romantic feelings to Luna, who returned them, in her usual quirky, matter-of-fact way.
    Their romance blossomed over the next year as school life returned mostly to normal for them. They paid little attention to Harry's activities throughout the year until the school was invaded by death-eaters, which was decently difficult to ignore.
    As usual, Emily returned to Ohio over that summer, but having kept up on the news, Morgan was insistent that she not return the next year, preferring instead to move and hide the young witch. Emily argued that even though she did not live in England, Voldemort's minions would still track her down and probably kill Morgan and her father. In the end, Emily got her way and returned to Hogwarts for her sixth year.
    Emily joined with Luna and Neville in reinstating Dumbledore's Army in efforts to battle the death-eaters. Emily remained proud of her House, however, being convinced that Voldemort and his death-eaters were corruptions of what House Slytherin was meant to be.
    Over Christmas break, she stayed at Luna's house, but was out of the house when her girlfriend was abducted. Upon her return, Mr. Lovegood attempted to tell her that Luna had gone to visit with relatives, but Emily was unconvinced. She returned to Hogwarts early, now an even more staunch supporter of Neville's student rebellion. When Luna returned for the final battle, the two fought side by side.
    Emily returned to Ohio for that summer for a month before returning to England to stay with Luna. She returned to Hogwarts for her final year while Luna explored magizoological pursuits. After graduation, Emily apprenticed under Mr. Ollivander as a wandmaker.
    Emily and Luna moved into their own place and remained together for a number of years, however, their relationship ended and they parted ways, Luna eventually marrying Rolf Scamander while Emily, though having a couple other partners, remained unmarried. (Stupid official EU canon from Rowling. I would much rather they stay together, even marry, but noooo, Luna has to marry Rolf.:grumble )
     
  2. Alora Sionn

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    By its very nature, a self insertion fic will be scoffed at by some, you aren't going to get around that. And the parents dying thing is a common theme in main characters/mary sue fanfic characters HOWEVER---she does not have a "stupid" backstory that I've seen in a lot of characters. Her parents die, yes, but they don't "somehow" both die together, its tragic but more realistic to have them die years apart.

    In your short description, the family members don't sound totally hollow and existing solely for the main character. You gave them their own likes and they interact with each other, not just the main character. Some of the associations with the main characters of harry Potter are a bit typical fanfic, but I think common threads like that can work if they are written well. They never work when written poorly. I don't know if I have ever read one of your stories per say but judging from your poems and the fact that you think deeply on things, I think you can pull it off :) You should see if you can post your story up here as a reoccurring story for the Tar Valon Times ^^
     
  3. Dnae Ila

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    Thanks. (I just want to point out that it's insertion, certainly, but not really self insertion. Emily's not actually much like me.)
    To be perfectly honest, there's one reason why I killed off her parents, and I imagine it's the same reason Harry is an orphan (aside from the prophecy thing - from a writing standpoint) : to give her a reason to not know much about the wizarding world. While I didn't want her to be completely unfamiliar like Harry, I wanted her to not have any preconceptions about House Slytherin or Harry.
    And like I said, I don't know if I'll ever really write more than what's here. I have some skill for writing, but not much patience. :p
     
  4. Megana Vallentin

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    With fanfiction it can be very easy to be lazy, because everyone already knows the characters. Sometimes OC stories are the best ones, because to do them WELL the author has to put a lot of thought and detail into the character, which translates into a lot of thought and detail in the story as a whole. It sounds like your character would be integrated into the story very nicely without Mary Sue-ing someone else out of place or overshadowing the real characters, and I'm sure Luna fans would love more stories that have Luna in such a major role.
     
  5. Dnae Ila

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    I'm just disappointed with the way it has to end. And yes, it does have to end that way. My nature won't allow me to go against canon so blatantly. So, they have to break up.

    OR... It could end with Emily's death... Hmm...
     
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  6. Amina Coram

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    Oh I love this! You should write it and post it and I will love it to bits
     
  7. Cold Manshima

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    I have just a minor note on the canon in the backstory here. You mention a "Hogwarts fund" so the character can go there; as far as everything in the series, there is no tuition for Hogwarts. Sure, everything needed for schooling costs money (wand, books, robe, etc.), but it's apparently free to attend. Which is a little odd, considering the costs of room and board, but no student in the series ever mentions having to pay the school anything.

    "Saddened that she could not care for her granddaughter or watch her grow up, Alice's mother had set up a Hogwarts fund for Emily, and had paid into it regularly over the years, so upon reaching her eleventh birthday, Emily received the expected enrollment letter by owl."

    Perhaps I'm misunderstanding, but the way this reads, it makes it sound like the enrollment letter couldn't have come without the Hogwarts fund.

    Besides that, I wanted to say that this is incredibly thoughtful, well put-together, and well-written. Done properly, this could be done completely on par with the Harry Potter books themselves. I think that there's a huge amount of people that would be thrilled to read more about the Harry Potter world, assuming it's done right. I think plenty of people (myself included) would enjoy going back to Hogwarts with new characters, even if it was relatively mundane, without Voldemort appearing at all.

    This would be fun to do as a manga series, writing the story of a young witch/wizard going to Hogwarts, and their individual experiences, friends, rivals, strengths, weaknesses, etc.! Each individual manga being the story of a different character, I mean.
     
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  8. Ealandrelle Melyma

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    The part about the fund - I agree with Cold. For all that it's a magical school, it's still a "state" school, thus would be free to attend. I think you could easily make the fund for her books, robes and so on - perhaps for pocket money?

    Other than that, I like the sound of the character. I think a tragic death could be an interesting way to end things...
     
  9. Dnae Ila

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    When I wrote the part about the fund, I actually had been thinking of school supplies and the like, since Emily's grandmother would have realized that, being raised in a muggle family, she would have no wizarding money at all. I think I just worded things oddly. But I wonder now about getting into Hogwarts. It seems to be implied that attendance to a wizarding school was not mandatory and just the way people talk about the school makes me think that attending Hogwarts was a privilege and not an inevitability. So then would there be some sort of application? Harry obviously didn't, but then, he was a special case.
    Then again, I probably have a very American view of schools. I don't know if there's a difference.
    I dunno. Hogwarts just always felt to me like a prestigious school and not just the school everyone goes to because it's the only one.
    But then, if it is just the only one, and enrollment letters go out to every young witch or wizard within its, uh, region when they come of age, why would they make an exception for Emily? Surely there would be American wizarding schools for her to attend. If it's simply a mandatory public school, it doesn't seem like they'd extend an invitation to someone halfway across the world just because her parents were former students.

    Also, as a side note, I've decided that Emily would get a bird for carrying messages when she starts school. But not an owl. She has an Arctic Tern. Because they are well used to traveling for days without rest, and it would be much better suited for traveling across the Atlantic than an owl, which tend to fly no more than five miles at a time. Yeah, yeah, I know, magic. But even in a magical world, my fantasies need to have roots in reality, gersh dernit!
     
  10. Cold Manshima

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    Hmm, that's a good point about special circumstances for someone in America. Perhaps instead of just automatically receiving a letter, maybe someone from the school would show up to discuss options?

    None of the characters in the books ever discuss having to apply; in the first book, Neville mentions that it's a surprise to him and his family when he receives the letter (due to him being barely a wizard early on).

    You have some wiggle-room here, since there's an inconsistency in the books. In the first book, Hermione makes a comment on the train about being "ever so surprised to receive the letter"; in the last book, in Snape's memory, he explains to Lily that someone from the school will have to come and explain things to her family since she's Muggle-Born (he says something like, "Ordinarily the letter would come by owl, but someone from the school will come and explain things").

    Although I suppose you could say that the policy just changed in the intervening years, but it always felt like an inconsistency to me.
     
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  11. Falone Charpontier

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    Loved your detail, and the America angle would be interesting.